高中英语作文点评：豫园 Yu Garden

Yu Garden
豫园

If a foreign friend of mine is going to visit my hometown, Shanghai, I would like to take her to Yu Garden.
如果我的一个外国朋友参观我的家乡,上海,我想带她去豫园。

Yu Garden is a traditional Chinese garden located beside the City God Temple in the northeast of Shanghai. Here she will marvel at the exotic and exquisite beauty of the Chinese Garden. She can walk on the crooked bridge and take photos of the beautiful goldfish. Besides, she can taste the local cuisines like steamed buns, wonton noodles, soy milk. There are a variety of mouth-watering snacks there. Apart from the beautiful scenery and delicious food, she will also be attracted by the remarkable performance of different craftsmen. For example, she will see Shanghai-style paper-cutting, and the process of making Chinese candy and clay figurines.
豫园是一个传统的中式花园坐落在上海的城隍庙在东北。她会惊叹中国人的异国情调和精致的美丽花园。她能走在弯曲的桥梁和拍摄美丽的'金鱼。此外,她可以品尝当地的美食像馒头,馄饨面条,豆浆。有各种各样的美味小吃。除了美丽的风景和美味的食物,她也会显著的性能不同的工匠所吸引。例如,她会看到海派剪纸,中国糖果和粘土雕像的过程。

I believe my friend will have a great day if she visits Yu Garden. This is a place where the features of this city are combined.
我相信我的朋友会有美好的一天,如果她访问豫园。这是这个城市的特点结合的地方。

【点评】

本次四级作文一反以往的图片题形式，改为情境式话题作文，可能让准备好图片题写作的同学有点措手不及。不过话题贴近生活，要求介绍自己家乡的某景点，写起来相对简单。此类文章在结构上的要求不像议论文那样严格，所以可以在语言文字上博出彩，增加词汇的丰富性、句子的流畅性都是不错的加分点。